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Summer
and the skeletons of the past
dance on newly dug graves
as muscles thaw
and lungs rattle from seasons unused
the heart begins to pump with
Autumn
and the skeletons keep dancing
their bones rattling
as dead leaves fall upon the graves
of the dearly departed
Winter
and the skeletons are slowing
their bones shudshudshuddering
as frost descends upon the land
and not a flower has been left
to show who the loved ones
Spring
and the skeletons have stopped
their bones dust
as rain begins to fall
and cautious hearts quiver to life
amidst the memories that are
and the skeletons of the past
dance on newly dug graves
as muscles thaw
and lungs rattle from seasons unused
the heart begins to pump with
caution
Autumn
and the skeletons keep dancing
their bones rattling
as dead leaves fall upon the graves
of the dearly departed
lies
Winter
and the skeletons are slowing
their bones shudshudshuddering
as frost descends upon the land
and not a flower has been left
to show who the loved ones
are
Spring
and the skeletons have stopped
their bones dust
as rain begins to fall
and cautious hearts quiver to life
amidst the memories that are
painful
i don't really like this one?? IDK. it doesn't really sound right to me.
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I like the second message in there.
Favorite part: First paragraph and shudshudshuddering
I feel like it would have been fine if you hadn't stuck with the skeleton theme- between that and the fact that you needed to fill in so it would fit the second message, it seems a bit forced, though not terribly so.
There's my mini-critique for ya
Lovely work, as always~
Favorite part: First paragraph and shudshudshuddering
I feel like it would have been fine if you hadn't stuck with the skeleton theme- between that and the fact that you needed to fill in so it would fit the second message, it seems a bit forced, though not terribly so.
There's my mini-critique for ya
Lovely work, as always~